A story made up of nothing but dialogue is a challenge for me, because I’m not especially good at it. I haven’t written one in a long time and today I feel, oddly, inspired by soap operas. I suspect nothing good can come of this, but I’m giving it a shot.
“Stay away! Go away, or I swear to god I’ll call the cops! Go. Go.”
“Baby, listen. Please, just listen. I’m -“
“You have the nerve to apologize, after what you did? With the pool boy!”
”It didn’t mean nothing. He wasn’t always a pool boy and I know him from way back. But I’m just into you these days, baby, just you. He means nothing to me. Nothing!”
“Out!”
“I-“
“Officer? Yes, my ex is harassing me and won’t leave. Could you – thank you.”
“You shouldn’t have done that, baby. You really shouldn’t have. You see this? Give me a hundred thousand and your computer, and the world won’t see it.”
“Get OUT.”
When the cops get there she can tell them about the blackmail threats too. 🙂
yes, that should be fun!
Pretty good. I’ve never tried dialogue-only story before, either. Your story inspires me to give it a try someday.
You should! It’s interesting.
This was great! Grew up on soap operas. Oh the drama!! (Another good D word!)
It is, it is, wish I had thought of it.
I like your dialogue! Dialogue only stories are not the easiest to write, but you did well. I hope she can shake off that Ex for good! Have a wonderful weekend!
Thanks a lot!
I liked your story Sonia and think you did very well with the dialogue only method.
I think dialogue can be tricksy but the trick to good dialogue tis to keep it real, in other words say it like someone would in real life, then it becomes believable. ^_^
Sometimes I have trouble doing that.
Maybe she should look into deleting him…
LOL That’s funny.
I think you did a great job and you should be proud of yourself. Good choice for “D”. Carol – http://batteredhope.blogspot.com
Thanks Carol!
I love dialogue, how a person uses words can say so much about them beneath what the words seem to be saying. My flash this week is also dialogue only, but it’s deliberately a crowd scene so you don’t know who is talking at any one time, but you can still tell a lot about the mentality of the people!
I read it and I loved it!
I think you did well with that, for a first attempt. In my mind you painted a complete picture.
J.L. Campbell writes at The Character Depot and the Jamaican Kid Lit Blog.
Thanks Campbell!
I have great difficulty writing dialogue only Sonia so I greatly admire those who do it well, as you have done here. Their emotions pop right out there.
Thanks a lot! It is hard. I went through a couple quick revisions.
I agree with Deanna – you did a really good job with the dialogue and the emotions, and there is a story too. I do enjoy flash fiction 🙂
I like flash fiction, too! Thanks!
Great post! I really want to know what he was trying to blackmail her with.
LOL I am not entirely sure.
A good snippet of dialogue.
Stories should have a mix of narrative and dialogue… it balances the story…
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Thanks!