This idea just came to me.
The white stag raced across the muddy, churned-up meadow, shimmered and disappeared.
Fucking fae.
Fury swept through Hammer. He fisted his hands, wanting to hit something. Preferably the fae. The stupid lying fae – how could he be so stupid?
He knew they lied. Knew he shouldn’t believe the stag’s sweet words.
Hammer turned, slammed his fist into the tree behind him. Pain sang up his arm. He welcomed it, welcomed the splinters. Anything to take his mind off the stag’s betrayal.
He smashed his fist into the tree again. Heard something crack. He looked up and something silver fell to the ground in front of him. A ring.
He bent and picked it up. The words I am sorry were etched around the band.
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great writing….what more need be said
thanks Florida!
Oooo, I like this! Nice job, just banging it out like that too.
thanks a lot Larry!
Nice story, now I want more! ^_^
I think I do, too.
Even fae stags must feel remorse.
I hope thumping the tree hasn’t made his fingers too swollen to wear the ring though. 🙂
I suppose they must. I expect he’ll wear it around his neck instead.
Lovely.
Thank you Louise!
I enjoyed this – it was full of frustration. I aparticularly liked the line “pain sang up his arm”. You might want to consider using “preferably” to ” preferable”.
Thanks, I meant to say preferably. LOL
I enjoyed this – it was full of frustration. I aparticularly liked the line “pain sang up his arm”. You might want to consider using “preferably” to ” preferable”.
Dear Sonia,
‘Pain sang up his arm..’ This is a great sentence among many in your tight little story. Pleasant reading. is this going to go places?
Aloha,
Doug
http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/04/20/the-endless-sea/
I am not sure yet, but I hope so.
Interesting take on the prompt. Ouch…I hurt for him, hurting himself Didn’t expect the delightful, surprise ending. Nice work. Thank you for visiting my story.
Thanks Lora!
Great piece of automatic writing..full of drive and rage..
automatic writing? Not sure what you mean by that, but thanks.
Fascinating. I could feel Hammer’s anguish in the emotions you drew through your words. I think there’s a typo – sliver for silver – the ring was certainly a great intro to a new part of the story. this feels like an opening to a longer piece I’d love to read!
I’m over here: http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/04/20/friday-fiction-maturity/
Thanks, I will fix it!
You’ve evoked his anger tinged with anguish and even regret very well in this short piece.
Thanks so much Aidan!
I’ve felt like that too. Just wanting to hit something. Luckily I have a punching bag to take out my frustrations out on. I think you captured his anger nicely.
A punching bag is probably easier on the fingers than a tree!
I want to know more about the story behind the ring. Interesting piece though!
Thanks, John, I am sure I’ll figure it out.
I like the pace and passion in this Sonia. Nice work
Thanks Brain!
I enjoyed that story Sonia, always love stories to do with fairies, mythological creatures. You captured the angst of Hammer very nicely. There’s a typo with silver/sliver although at first sliver seemed to work too.
LOL Hadn’t considered that it would. Thanks Madison!
Another example of I opened a tab and forgot about it. I just found this trying to clean out the 200+ tabs I have open right now.
Great writing, I am sad I missed being on time to read this one. This is another good example of how with few words you leave all of us dying to hear more about it. >.<