The First Campaign Challenge is:
Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “The door swung open” These four words will be included in the word count.
If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), use the same beginning words and end with the words: “the door swung shut.” (also included in the word count)
For those who want an even greater challenge, make your story 200 words EXACTLY!
My attempt at this is exactly 200 words, sans title.
Title: Black Rainbows
The door swung open and he stormed into our bedroom. A black t-shirt dangled from his hand. His bare body glistened from his shower.
“I don’t do black,” he announced.
I lifted my gaze from his junk. “Your mother had it especially made.”
The words “Edward and Sam: 1st Anniversary” were printed on it in large rainbow-colored letters. My name marched up one side; Edward’s marched down the other. I liked it.
“She knows I detest black! She was counting on you to make me wear it.” He glowered at me, as if I’d betrayed him.
She knew; she gave me a white shirt just in case. “There is nothing wrong with black.”
“It’s hideous.”
His dislike of black clothes made no sense. “She’s making a statement. The rest of the family will be dressed in rainbow colors. Let her make it.”
“I don’t want to make any statement!”
“It’ll make your mother happy,” I reminded him.
He grumbled under his breath.
I put my hands on my thighs; his eyes followed my fingers down and lingered a moment too long.
“I’ll make it worth your while to wear the shirt.”
His eyes took on that gleam I loved.
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Woohoo! Now this a unique usage of the prompt. Great job. 🙂
Thank you!
Ohh la la…ha ha. This is only the second sexy entry I’ve read. Nice take ~ Nadja
You’re doing better than I am! LOL
They should skip the party and stay in bed! Nice job. I’m #72
That would be a lot more fun
I like this. It has some a little humor to it.
Thanks Nicole!
Hee, I giggled a little. Cute with a hefty dash of sexy 😉
Ohh that’s good. Thanks Sinkhorn!
Cute 🙂
🙂
You made me smile 🙂 And what a couple of characters. The sexual tension running through it really makes this story.
Thanks! Adding just the right amount of sexual tension was the hardest part.
I would have thought he would be more concerned about having his and her names blazoned on the t shirt lol. Nice Story Sonia! That prompt had me thinking in terms of a western…. hmm maybe I’ll use it ^__^
I know, right? But no, it’s the color he dislikes.
I can’t wait to see it! That this week’s friday flash?
I thought that was great!
Thanks Ruth!
I loved this line — My name marched up one side; Edward’s marched down the other.
Hehe Thanks Dawn!
Whoa baby! Nice job! 🙂
Thanks Katie! 😉
ah, the mother & the lover…great tension!
Thanks!
Too fun! Love this!:)
Thank you Carrie!
Congratulations. Your flash fiction has been chosen to go on to stage two of the competition. There will be a semi-final (stage three) and a final (stage four). Good luck with the next stages. I particularly enjoyed the ‘cheeky’ elements in this story.
Ohh thank you so much! I so happy. Didn’t expect this.
The line about the junk got me to laugh out loud in a good way. I love it when an narrator is uninhibited. It makes me like them a lot, and I really liked her!
You took a prompt, turned it into something everyday and seemingly mundane, but really made it shine and gave it purpose through your dialogue! A great entry that gave me a good, hearty smile and allowed me to feel satisfied that I’d read a completely self-contained piece.
I was going for self-contained! Thank so much
My thoughts were “Thighs? And what’s he looking at….oh” then I laughed.
LOL I was trying not to write certain words in. Glad I made you laugh
This one was so different from any of the others I’ve read so far! Good job with it 🙂 I really liked the ending 😉
I am unique! Good. Thanks 😉
Loved the line,
“My name marched up one side; Edward’s marched down the other.”
Thank you.
Thanks Maria!
Hi there Sonia — being a man who only wears black, I’m like the mirror twin of this guy; I’d be more bothered about the rainbows and name-thing, though. Good read in a small space and, strangely, my mind added ‘the door swung shut’ after the cheeky ending. St.
Only black? I love black myself though I wear a lot of other colors. That’s funny about the door. LOL
Well, at least she was getting him to wear black. And he would enjoy it.
He certainly would! LOL
Great job of steaming it up quickly!
Thanks Brinda!
that was very cool, love hour you are steaming up the scene…. you wanna check out my one.. we may have something in common…lol.
Thanks! You are right, we do. LOL
Very fun 🙂 I wish it wasn’t only 200 words!
Another 200 words and it would have been too much for my blog. LOL
You made me blush! ; )
Aww . . . should I apologize?
Oh, that was lovely! I think that was the first “happy” one I read for the challenge 🙂
Yeah, flashes do tend to be dark. There aren’t too many happy/positive ones.
Steamy very steamy:)
Thanks Doreen!
That was great! I love that last bit.
Thanks Christine!
Hell, I’ll wear the black if he won’t!!
His lover talked him into it! LOL But I am sure he appreciates the offer.
I can’t imagine not liking to wear black hehe. But I like this usage. It’s different to all the other ones I’ve read. Kind of refreshing and a little cheeky
I can’t imagine it, either. I love black! LOL
Hey, that was brilliant!! Love it. Love the play between them, the knowledge of each other.
And that he detests black, lol.
Thanks Sash!
Ooooo that was fun, sexy and humorous all rolled in one; great voice. Loved it! 😀
Thank you, yikici
You women with your feminine wiles. What chance do we have?
Cute story, liked it.
None whatsoever! LOL Thanks. 😉
Sonia, I loved this piece! Everything from the title on down was very creative and well-written. I also snooped around your blog a bit. You are GOOD at this flash fiction stuff!!!
Kudos.
I love the story title! Thanks so much Bryce. LOL I do flashes for #fridayflash and a lot of the others are betters.
Haha, loved this! And voted for you, too! 🙂
Thanks Kelley!
Liked it a lot! Cute.
Thanks ebarrett!
Hey thanks for stopping by my blog. I really love all of the colors on yours too! Great Flash fiction!
Thanks, I wanted the blog to be colorful, but not overwhelmingly so.
Mee-ow. I snorted at “I lifted my gaze from his junk.” The impact of that line, haha. Bravo!
LOL Thanks!
Ohh I love this. Love that ending.
Oh, good! Thanks Christine
Very intense! Loved it!
Thanks Holly!
Ha! Cheeky. Women don’t use sex for leverage, do they? 😉
This is so unique, i’m gonna have to vote for it.
Certainly not! Can’t imagine what give you that impression! LOL Thanks for the vote Scott!
It’s been a lot of fun to see what direction people take this prompt – I really liked yours. As was said above, it was a really different view – very fun 😉
Different is good! (I hope) Thanks Shelley!
I like this sexy story. It’s a cute take on the prompt.
Woo hoo, sexy! Love it! Thanks for commenting on mine (#347) and glad I returned the favour 🙂
Glad you liked it, Claire!
A great piece. The dialogue flowed and made the couple easy to picture. Perhaps too easy 😉 Your story scene made me smile.
There is no such thing as too easy to picture! Thanks Elaine!
Mwa ha ha! Bribery – gotta love it! Great job – I’m totally voting for you! 🙂
Thanks for the vote, Crystal!
Good job! This is really good! 🙂
Thanks Kathy!
“I lifted my gaze from his junk”. Loved it! Refreshing read, thank you!
This is the first sexy one I’ve read. It’s great. 🙂 Thanks for stopping by my blog. I’m a new follower through RSS feed.
Nice one, Sonia. Inventive situation, good dialog, a little zing. Great!