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First Campaigner Challenge: The door swung open

The First Campaign Challenge is:

Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “The door swung open” These four words will be included in the word count.

If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), use the same beginning words and end with the words: “the door swung shut.” (also included in the word count)

For those who want an even greater challenge, make your story 200 words EXACTLY!

My attempt at this is exactly 200 words, sans title.

Title: Black Rainbows

The door swung open and he stormed into our bedroom. A black t-shirt dangled from his hand. His bare body glistened from his shower.

“I don’t do black,” he announced.

I lifted my gaze from his junk. “Your mother had it especially made.”

The words “Edward and Sam: 1st Anniversary” were printed on it in large rainbow-colored letters. My name marched up one side; Edward’s marched down the other. I liked it.

“She knows I detest black! She was counting on you to make me wear it.” He glowered at me, as if I’d betrayed him.

She knew; she gave me a white shirt just in case. “There is nothing wrong with black.”

“It’s hideous.”

His dislike of black clothes made no sense. “She’s making a statement. The rest of the family will be dressed in rainbow colors. Let her make it.”

“I don’t want to make any statement!”

“It’ll make your mother happy,” I reminded him.

He grumbled under his breath.

I put my hands on my thighs; his eyes followed my fingers down and lingered a moment too long.

“I’ll make it worth your while to wear the shirt.”

His eyes took on that gleam I loved.

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95 thoughts on “First Campaigner Challenge: The door swung open

  1. I would have thought he would be more concerned about having his and her names blazoned on the t shirt lol. Nice Story Sonia! That prompt had me thinking in terms of a western…. hmm maybe I’ll use it ^__^

  2. Congratulations. Your flash fiction has been chosen to go on to stage two of the competition. There will be a semi-final (stage three) and a final (stage four). Good luck with the next stages. I particularly enjoyed the ‘cheeky’ elements in this story.

  3. The line about the junk got me to laugh out loud in a good way. I love it when an narrator is uninhibited. It makes me like them a lot, and I really liked her!

    You took a prompt, turned it into something everyday and seemingly mundane, but really made it shine and gave it purpose through your dialogue! A great entry that gave me a good, hearty smile and allowed me to feel satisfied that I’d read a completely self-contained piece.

  4. Hi there Sonia — being a man who only wears black, I’m like the mirror twin of this guy; I’d be more bothered about the rainbows and name-thing, though. Good read in a small space and, strangely, my mind added ‘the door swung shut’ after the cheeky ending. St.

  5. I can’t imagine not liking to wear black hehe. But I like this usage. It’s different to all the other ones I’ve read. Kind of refreshing and a little cheeky

  6. Hey, that was brilliant!! Love it. Love the play between them, the knowledge of each other.

    And that he detests black, lol.

  7. Sonia, I loved this piece! Everything from the title on down was very creative and well-written. I also snooped around your blog a bit. You are GOOD at this flash fiction stuff!!!

    Kudos.

  8. It’s been a lot of fun to see what direction people take this prompt – I really liked yours. As was said above, it was a really different view – very fun 😉

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