This flash was inspired by memories of a recent storm. Wind, hail, rain. Watching it was pretty damn glorious.
A storm raged through the mountains, slashing at the lone peaks like a claws slashed at flesh.
The god was upset. She stood under the open skies, soaked to the bone, hair clinging to her skull and crowed.
She’d told him, hadn’t she? She’d told him.
Disobeying the god did no good. Even if the rules were wrong, unjust and hateful. Opposing him was like carrying water in cupped hands. Impossible.
Her brother was stupid stubborn. He wanted to protect his daughter. It wasn’t her fault the boy died, he said. She had to defend herself.
They’d both die now.
Ow, a fine and powerful sad story. mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/07/27/fridayfictioneers-aqua-madness/
how would the god make them pay? I am not feeling mercy here… nicely done, left me wondering
Intense, and full of emotion – well done!
Wow, again, I want to hear more from this story. xD I hate how you keep doing that, but I love it!
Great description of the storm! Nicely done.
I am not a religious person, but the notion of a storm in the heavens being created by a god in ire is one of the most credible of theological notions.
marc nash
Nothing like a good storm to show mortals you are displeased with them!
Wow, that’s some wild storytelling — and the whole thing fit comfortably on my iPhone screen!
High impact! I love the imagery of “slashing the lone peaks like claws slashed at flesh.”
Piqued my curiosity. Was her brother trying to defend his daughter against a boy who was attacking the daughter, and the god became angry because the daughter had killed the boy in self defense?
http://ebooksscifi.wordpress.com/2012/07/27/kingdom-come-by-ilyan-kei-lavanway-for-madison-woods-friday-fictioneers-100-word-flash-fiction/
Beautiful visions Sonia! A mighty storm created by an angry god to punish those who rebel – it’s quite a fearful scenario.
Well done.
Sadistically creepy, well done!